Tuesday, September 15, 2015

Landscape (Reveals Charcter and What will Happen)

Perhaps the most distinctive use of this is from the Hobbit.  

My favorite lesson of any semester is showing the molding life of Bilbo Baggins by the house he lives in. 

The first image Tolkien gives us is a hole:

"In a hole in the ground there lived a hobbit. Not a nasty, dirty, wet hole, filled with the ends of worms and an oozy smell, nor yet a dry, bare, sandy hole with nothing in it to sit down on or to eat: it was a hobbit­hole, and that means comfort " (Tolkien 1).

We are given the symbol of a hole.  Tolkien explains that it is not "oozy" or "dry" but that it clearly "comfortable"  (Tolkien 1).   We go onto read more:

"It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube­shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats ­ the hobbit was fond of visitors"   (Tolkien 1).

Without too much ado Tolkien places  no hierarchy to the landscape.  This hobbit does in fact live in or under the earth.  His house has lots of furnishings, but Tolkien clearly inserts that the Hobbit clearly likes visitors which will go on to later bite the Hobbit in the ass in the form of the dwarves.  As well the house is filled with lots of maticulous furnishings--clearly the kind that need upkeep and maintenance.

The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill ­ The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it ­ and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another. No going upstairs for the hobbit: bedrooms, bathrooms, cellars, pantries (lots of these), wardrobes (he had whole rooms devoted to clothes), kitchens, dining ­rooms, all were on the same floor, and indeed on the same passage. The best rooms were all on the left­hand side (going in), for these were the only ones to have windows, deep­set round windows looking over his garden and meadows beyond, sloping down to the river"  (Tolkien 1).

At first glance the house reads as oppulant and lavish, and interestingly enough, people are caught up in the rustic idea of the Hobbit Hole House.  But a deep reading of this house is that it is an excessive place, filled with excess.  The fact that Tolkien uses plural nouns to describe what Bilbo has--he has multiple rooms and most people are lucky to have one bathroom, one dining room or one cellar.  

Bilbo Baggins has so much stuff--he even has whole, plural "rooms devoted to clothing" which apart from being a male is quite excessive.  You also might notice there is no heirarchy of the rooms.  

All rooms are on the same floor--meaning Bilbo has so much stuff that it is all the same to him.  None of it is really his--which you later find out was all built by his parents and gifted to him.

Bilbo's true heart looks beyond the Hobbit hole.  "The best rooms were all on the left ­hand side (going in), for these were the only ones to have windows, deep­set round windows looking over his garden and meadows beyond, sloping down to the river"  (Tolkien 1).

Tolkien shows us a man living in a house that is actually in the ground.  In a sense, this place is a grave, filled with stuff. The Hobbit longs for escape from the place by his affinity for visitors and his yearning to go beyond is garden to the "meadow beyond, sloping down to the river" (Tolkien 1). 

Again the house  was his father's dream,  all of which was bought by his Father,(using his mother's money) and if one even watches the movie, you see Bilbo sits here daily stagnating.  The movie has an air of high fantasy, but if there's one things that Peter Jackson does well, its showing that Bilbo's a bit of a sissy, and Gandalf calls him on it.  Bilbo hides in his own house from any adventure.

In the paragraph about Bilbo's Mother we are given quite a bit about her which tells us a lot about Bilbo. "The mother of our particular hobbit … what is a hobbit? I suppose hobbits need some description nowadays, since they have become rare and shy of the Big People, as they call us. They are (or were) a little people, about half our height, and smaller than the bearded Dwarves. Hobbits have no beards. There is little or no magic about them, except the ordinary everyday sort which helps them to disappear quietly and quickly when large stupid folk like you and me come blundering along, making a noise like elephants which they can hear a mile off" (Tolkien 1).

We can see quite clearly that Hobbits are pretty boring.

"They are inclined to be at in the stomach; they dress in bright colours (chiefly green and yellow); wear no shoes, because their feet grow natural leathery soles and thick warm brown hair like the stuff on their heads (which is curly); have long clever brown fingers, good­natured faces, and laugh deep fruity laughs (especially after dinner, which they have twice a day when they can get it). Now you know enough to go on with" (Tolkien 1).

As we can also see Hobbits are garish.  They remind meof people that dress extravagantly but eat far too much.

"As I was saying, the mother of this hobbit ­ of Bilbo Baggins, that is ­ was the fabulous Belladonna Took, one of the three remarkable daughters of the Old Took, head of the hobbits who lived across The Water, the small river that ran at the foot of The Hill. It was often said (in other families) that long ago one of the Took ancestors must have taken a fairy wife. That was, of course, absurd, but certainly there was still something not entirely hobbit­like about them, ­ and once in a while members of the Took­clan would go and have adventures. They discreetly disappeared, and the family hushed it up; but the fact remained that the Tooks were not as respectable as the Bagginses, though they were undoubtedly richer. Not that Belladonna Took ever had any adventures after she became Mrs. Bungo Baggins. Bungo, that was Bilbo's father, built the most luxurious hobbit­hole for her (and partly with her money) that was to be found either under The Hill or over The Hill or across The Water, and there they remained to the end of their days. Still it is probable that Bilbo, her only son, although he looked and behaved exactly like a second edition of his solid and comfortable father, got something a bit queer in his makeup from the Took side, something that only waited for a chance to come out. The chance never arrived, until Bilbo Baggins was grown up, being about fifty years old or so, and living in the beautiful hobbit­hole built by his father, which I have just described for you, until he had in fact apparently settled down immovably" (Tolkien 1).

Someone said once we live in dreams, that when we are young we ache for travel and adventure, but when we get old we desire comfort and security.  Bilbo is the expression of that, he is dead and if you read the first four paragraphs of the Hobbit, you get the idea that that the adventure is what he yearns for, what changes him and what brings him to life.

Today I want to show you the power of landscape at the beginning of something.  Bear in mind most movies start with Landscape, and all the best writers, translate for you when you start a movie what is going to happen.

The landscape here is more than just trees and vistas...In this example, we don't start with Trees and views, we start with Darkness.  Landscape can be more than just land views.  It can be rooms, objects, desks, and people, and the landscape you are going to see here is going to be more than that.   I'm going to show you how landscape in the hands of great writers will always reveal something about character and the story to come.

If you haven't read the four opening paragraphs of the Hobbit, please do, it is one of the most amazing revealing sections of writing about a character and about a story ever.  Here it is.

As an example, The Hobbit movie starts with Darkness, to which a older, refined Bilbo lights a match.    We then see the old Bilbo walking down the tunnel of his house, the solitary candle his light.  The music is upbeat, and we get a few images.  A Sword.   A Red journal which he opens to a picture of what he looked like when younger.  In bold words, "I am old now Frodo.  I'm not the same Hobbit I once was."  Here we clearly see the onder, wiser man reflecting on what he was.  What we're going to understand soon is that he was dying...a stagnant man more concerned with food and his mother's antiques than any kind of life.  If one reads the 4th Paragraph of The Hobbit, we find out so much about his Momma, who by the way, is mentioned directly by Gandalf and then shown at the end of the film.

Bilbo's next words are, "I think it is time for you know what really happened."  The Camera then pulls away from him as he starts to relay the story of the "Dwarves of Erabor."    As any young person, the excitement of the story of Erabor is just that exciting, but the power of The Hobbit, (book and movie) is really the strength of the story of Bilbo, a man who has never really known life, and he is about to relay how he had an amazing journey, but the journey we should connect to is his.  The opening of this movie is about him.  Sure, we get Kings, we get elves, we get dragons, but this book, and its deeper meaning, is about Bilbo.   The Camera moves from him and we get his take on the lost kingdom of Erebor.  We see fantastic stuff, but the power of the opening will always be Bilbo and here are a few examples of this.  These are my favorites:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x5k3X9huWVg



https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q_cwRqXBR4Q




https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_LUPCclOULk

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nm4oBnlx_Ho

And the One that warms my heart:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dDKVKG3ESsk


I'm going to give you another example  here of how landscape reveals character.  This is from Wuthering Heights

1801. - I have just returned from a visit to my landlord - the solitary neighbour that I shall be troubled with. This is certainly a beautiful country! In all England, I do not believe that I could have fixed on a situation so completely removed from the stir of society. A perfect misanthropist's heaven: and Mr. Heathcliff and I are such a suitable pair to divide the desolation between us. A capital fellow! He little imagined how my heart warmed towards him when I beheld his black eyes withdraw so suspiciously under their brows, as I rode up, and when his fingers sheltered themselves, with a jealous resolution, still further in his waistcoat, as I announced my name. 'Mr. Heathcliff?' I said.
A nod was the answer.

'Mr. Lockwood, your new tenant, sir. I do myself the honour of calling as soon as possible after my arrival, to express the hope that I have not inconvenienced you by my perseverance in soliciting the occupation of Thrushcross Grange: I heard yesterday you had had some thoughts - '

'Thrushcross Grange is my own, sir,' he interrupted, wincing. 'I should not allow any one to inconvenience me, if I could hinder it - walk in!' 

(Notice right here, what Heathcliff means.  You are insignificant to me, and though you are renting my property, it is not yours, it's mine.  There's a warning here that passes over Lockwood's head.  Nobody hurts me.  i allow you to rent the property, but guess what, it's mine.)

The 'walk in' was uttered with closed teeth, and expressed the sentiment, 'Go to the Deuce:' even the gate over which he leant manifested no sympathising movement to the words; and I think that circumstance determined me to accept the invitation: I felt interested in a man who seemed more exaggeratedly reserved than myself. 

(It also completely passes over Lockwood's head that Heathcliff doesn't really want to be bothered by Lockwood...)

When he saw my horse's breast fairly pushing the barrier, he did put out his hand to unchain it, and then sullenly preceded me up the causeway, calling, as we entered the court, - 'Joseph, take Mr. Lockwood's horse; and bring up some wine.' 

(Heathcliff only reacts here to the horse because Animals to him are purer than humans and the only reason he opens the gate is because Lockwood is too dense to see that Heathcliff DOES NOT WANT TO BE BOTHERED!)

'Here we have the whole establishment of domestics, I suppose,' was the reflection suggested by this compound order. 'No wonder the grass grows up between the flags, and cattle are the only hedge- cutters.'

Ultimately, here is what I have marked for you.  This opens with two men.  One renting a house in Northern England who is interested to meet his landlord. 

Heathcliff, his landlord isn't interested in his renter Lockwood other than to say, where's the rent? Also, he's pretty clear the man is "Renting," not "leasing" the property.  In fact, what is clearly shown here is I guess you can come in, and then Heathcliff DOESN'T open the gate for him, until he sees the man might be so dense as to literally drive his horse through the gate.

Lockwood makes particular note here of how unkept, Heathcliff's property is, and he attributes it to a whimsicality, or rusticness of his landlord.  But Heathcliff isn't whimsical, he's cold, hard and blunt.

The house, that Lockwood is renting is beautiful, its a large amazing house.  Later we will see that Heathcliff, the landlord lives in Wuthering Heights-- a smaller more natural house.

This story that spans several years is told through several sources, but it involves Heathcliff, and the servants Heathcliff "keeps," around him.  All of this is filtered through Lockwood, an upbeat man who is about to learn the extent of Heathcliff's heartbreak, his cruelty and his drive.

Heathcliff is a man who has weathered the years and now finds himself master of both houses, and the servants and tennants of each are a mixture of both houses, offspring of each charcter.

 Heathcliff owns both houses where our past story takes place, rents out the nicer, larger, cleaner and opulant house and lives in the rustically, less grand house.  Hevprefers it because it represents his connection to a younger, more gentle, less superficial Cathy who we are about to meet through stories and her ghost.

Heathcliff, is a bitter angry man, and as you can see, he only pauses for a minute to protect the horse, a creature with less than complex emotions.

Still, we will learn much about both Lockwood and Heathcliff in the book to come, and the type of person they are and ultimately what kid of man Heathcliff could have been,

Now bear in mind, none of this is guess work.  None.  I have read the whole book, and i know the ending of both the Hobbit and Wuthering Heights, so in order to draw these conclusions, i have read the whole book.

Everything we see in the opening paragraphs, alludes to what we will learn in the book, and i never make assumptions without all the information.   So, listen closely, you must never assume you can analyze something from the beginning without reading all the way through and knowing the ending.

That is the first key to analysis, when you read this remember that, you analyze the beginning with the full knowledge of the whole story.

If you read the whole book and find out what happens to Heathcliff, Cathy and their children, you discover that the opening landscape is very telling.  That between these two places, far from england, and far from prying eyes, all manor of inhumanity, love and tragedy happens--marked by the presence of unspoiled nature and kept secret from the prying eyes of the world.

Heathcliff is a very blunt, hard man and he knows very little of civilized society.  Lockwood is a good man who believes in good living, fairness and treating people well, but Heathcliff knows none of that.  He's had to claw his way up the ladder of success and when he's told someone he loves them, he's been told that they cannot be together--the love of his life chose the wealthy man of Thrushcross Grange, rather than him.  For Heathcliff the only pure things are natural, unspoiled, like childhood, animals and hunting.  He's a bit of a permanent hunter with people because he is a predator, and he applies his natural hunting ability to how he controls people and animals and how he aquired Thrushcross Grange and Wuthering Heights.

Heathcliff doesn't respond to Lockwood, because Heathcliff  is a closed off emotionless man.  He has conquered all his enemies.  Anyone who has wronged him is either dead, or in his servitude.  He lets, however, things respond naturally as they do, and ultimately, refuses to be troubled with even better living.

Heathcliff is a very troubled man--and here it is, all set up for you in the opening moments of the book, between Thrushcross Grange and Weathering Heights, and perhaps through the eyes of Lockwood, we will learn all of Heathcliff's secrets and the secrets of the supernatural.

Thursday, September 10, 2015

How to Write sentences with Resonant Points.

In crafting organic sentences, the first thing one needs to remember is that a good sentence usually reveals more than one "idea" in it.    Basic sentences have one plot point, someone did something--that's it, but great sentences often hint at other ideas beyond just the subject took a walk or did something.

When writing a sentence, a writer should craft a sentence  for two resonant points, meaning the first point, the subject's actions and secondarily perhaps something deeper, beyond the ordinary, that might be hidden, something perhaps dealing with emotion, or yearning, or the character of the person.  A good writer knows that no sentence is throw away, so in crafting sentences, he will give the reader at least two (maybe more) points to think about.

Here's an example: (It's famous so get ready.)

In a hole in the ground there lived a Hobbit.

This is such an excellent crafted line because one, the 1st resonant point is that there was a Hobbit and he lived in a hole.   What follows this are some of the most amazing sentences ever, because they go on to reveal that yes, his house is a hole, but there is a sublevel in how he lives, that his "living" is not really a pleasent living, its more a "living" death.  If you read the first five paragraphs of the Hobbit you'll see what i mean, which describes every bit of the house of this paricular Hobbit, but the first sentence we see the keys to how this sentence has more than one resonant point.

Notice the words I have underlined for you, which become the basics of how Resonant this sentence is.

1.  His home is literally in a hole.  Tolkien explains later what the hole is like, but one we associate holes as not good.  Tolkien will explain some of the good things about this hole, but as he does, if you are paying attention will start to notice that the good things, specifically the use of the word "hole" start to resemble something else.

2.  The ground.  (This is a place associated with death, in the earth, which in itself has very down to earth meanings, but mostly it is associated with things of death.  Things that live in the ground also struggle with being alive, and we associate them more with death then we do life.)

3.  The word "lived" is used.  Past Simple.  Meaning this is what was.  From here we will move foward, but lived implies current, though you will see how he lives, and you might make a decision as to whether this person is actually "living."

4.  Lastly the word "Hobbit" is very important because it is new.  It requires some explanation.  And Tolkien will explain it in the paragraphs that follows.  Every single one of these words is continually addressed.  Every one of these choices creates a "Resonant Point"  and there are in fact four in this sentence.  The Hole and the Ground, are in fact two different resonant points, as are the terms "lived" and "Hobbit."

For our purposes we should always try to create two resonant points, and here is how we start.

1.  Word Choice.  (We choose words that reflect the emotions we feel as we write.  Not only as the writer, but what is the emotion of what is going on in the story specifically:  what is happeneing and what will happen. (Only the author has some idea, but the words we use should reflect what we feel like saying.)  By the way lived, being Past Simple Tense also implies that the way he once lived, has now changed.  If you've read the Hobbit or even seen the movie--you know what Tolkien did and you know that the "character" is no longer that way anymore.   The descriptions of his life, after are what he does now, whereas in the beginning all we see are the "things" he collected with no signifigance.

In the Film, he is shown writing, the oppulance and abundance of his "hole" is shown in a different light almost like he didn't get back all the excess that was taken from him, in fact the opening of the next book, The Lord of the Rings tells us of his gifts to the people who robbed him.

2.  Organic Writing:  Study the Rule of Thirds, then apply the concepts to sentences.  Think of each sentence as a picture of a piece of art and with each sentece, you move closer and closer to the image, revealing more of the image.  Try to create depth by adding three things in the first sentence.  A place, a person (and his action) and an object (Acted Upon.)  Then remember that each sentence does not stand by itself and should be connected to the next subject unless the subject changes.

3. Write mostly sentences that have a Coordinating Conjunction in them so you are forced to actually add two different resonant points, or at least add commentary on the first point.

Example:
Tom was a ranch hand who lived to wrangle cows and sleep under the starlight, but contrary to these things, he was far from being a cowboy and much closer to the title, boy.

Here is an opening excercise where I write up an event and ever sentence has a coordinating conjunction in it:

Example:



As Sarah stood in the park she looked at me, and her eyes burned red.   

She dragged and clawed the gold diamond ring off of her index finger, threw it at me and lifted her middle finger for emphasis.
 
The ring landed in a black puddle in front of me, and the dirty mud-stained water splashed over my face and shoes.    

“I’m leaving now you Prick, “ she said, and she turned on her heel and walked steadily across the park to her car.  

 In that moment, the world seemed less that real through an overcast and stained horizon, and the sky itself darkened and started raining.  

 “I didn’t mean to,” was what I wanted to say to her, but I turned my head to the puddle, and watched as the gold ring sank deeper into the mud.
 

Tuesday, September 8, 2015

The Rule of Thirds in Writing

Think of every sentence as a picture.  There is setting, person and object presented in the sentence.  (This applies only to Narrative, descriptive essays or short stories.)  

Use these three things in a way to link through a paragraph, and uses some variation of the setting, object and Person or persons to link through a paragraph:

3 things.  Landscape.  The Boy.  The Dog.  
(These are my linking idea/object things.  Each sentence details something further about one of these things through the paragraph.) 

(Notice that each Paragraph also gives you a little more information about each thing.  The Boy The Landscape of the Story.  The Dog.)

 This is an example of elegant variation

It was a slow auburn day, when the boy first spotted the dog crawling along the fence-line at the edge of his yard

 Jesse stood up from his seat on the porch, where he had been carving a piece of wood and yelled, "Hey, get away from there, you dummy, that's Miller's property, and he shoots tress-passers."  

Whether Susie heard him is unclear because she inched closer to the fence-line and then under it over onto the adjacent property below the barbed-wire line.  

Without thinking Jesse rose and pounded across the lawn and after the intruder, where he reached under the wire and grabbed the dog's leg.